Class Sixteen
Last time, we went over the major problems with Draft One. What were those problems?
Journal:
Today, I want to begin by having you journal on how you removed those problems from your draft. Why is this a better draft than the last one? Make sure to use actual quotes from your paper in this journal entry
Class Discussion:
What is better in this paper, and why?
Let’s revisit the run-on, the comma splice, and today a new rule for the comma: the introductory element.
When a sentence begins with a word or phrase that changes the meaning of what follows, it is set off with a comma:
We went to kidnap the billionaire’s baby.
Yesterday we went to kidnap the billionaire’s baby.
Where does the comma go?
After we escaped from the police my mother told me that I was the world’s best get-away driver in the family.
Overnight the zombie menace took over all of the south and parts of the eastern seaboard.
Let’s look for examples in our own writing where we can use the introductory element rule. Five five in your writing.
Group discussion of the end of the book
Group presentation on the end of the book.
No homework for next time.
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